Caged chickens should be banned

We are learning to structure. We were aiming to use a title that tells the reader what the issue being argued is, use a rhetorical question, write an introduction that includes the three main points, organize ideas into paragraphs, make sure each paragraph has one main point and two examples, write a conclusion that includes my three main points, edit for spelling and punctuation and present my work to a peer for assessment. I found it easy to find facts because the facts were on our class site. I found it hard to put all the different ideas into paragraphs.

Hola

Yo soy Johnny. Yo tengo nueve años. Yo voy a St Mary’s escuela. Mi marae es Manutuke.
How would you feel to be a caged chicken? I firmly believe that caged chickens should be banned! They get diseases, theyŕe squashed and they can act natural.

My first main point is they are squished. 82% of chickens are caged. Each hen has space the same size as one A4 piece of paper each. 45 thousand chickens are caged in one shed.

My second main point is that the chickens can't act natural. They can't scratch for food. They can't perch and they can't build nests. They peck each other and eat each other. When they're squashed it's harder for them to lay eggs and when they stop laying eggs they kill them.

My third main reason is they get diseases in cages. They get fatty liver disease. They'll get osteoporosis. They're not outside in the light so they get rickets from lack of vitamin D.

You should let your chickens should be free range. The three main reasons is they can't move, they can't act natural and they get diseases.